tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1638918391005027628.post2337879805105494837..comments2013-06-17T21:39:16.733-07:00Comments on DemMangoes: Skydiving... Or should I say Spacediving?Andrewhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01426242485625656957noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-1638918391005027628.post-62800184484662051002012-10-21T13:34:13.022-07:002012-10-21T13:34:13.022-07:00Alayna
I like that you have included a video to en...Alayna<br />I like that you have included a video to enhance the experience for your readers. It helps to give your readers the context or reference about the subject of your post. Try to remember to also do this in the opening sentences of your paragraph.<br />Reminder: one of our learning intentions with our blogs is to improve our writing skills, specifically the more formal tone (not conversational). The humour is apparent in your tone but I think you could also achieve it without the conversational / "slangy" voice.<br />Ms Leeshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14425588470747075365noreply@blogger.com