The Space
Jump
Today in class we watched the space jump by Felix Baumgartner
it was so amazing to see a person fall a thousand kilometers per hour. When I
saw Felix Baumgartner jump from that capsule I could tell he was scared just
from his slight actions like thinking about disconnecting from the initial oxygen
tank. It takes someone with a lot of courage to do anything that no one has
done before. There were so many things that could have gone wrong from a tear
in his suit to running out of oxygen. This jump must of took a lot of planning and
it was not only Felix’s efforts that made this jump possible. Overall this jump
was spectacular and very impressive.
I really liked that you added a picture to your post. That is one advanctage for blogging over writing on paper in that you can add video, photos, other references and texts to make your post more appealing to your audience. When doing so, please try to remember to credit your source unless you are using material from Creative Commons.
ReplyDeleteYour post has some strenths with specific facts and details as well as your opinion throughout. May I use this post in class to model (show)some editing skills that will strengthen your writing and those of your peers?