THERE USED TO BE A VIDEO
HERE BUT RED BULL TOOK IT
DOWN SO OH WELL DEAL WITH IT
JEEZ I WONDER IF ANYONE
(MS. LEES, I'M DEPENDING ON YOU)
WILL EVEN NOTICE THIS AND IF SO, HI
So yeah, today we saw some videos about this man who jumped off the edge of space. I remember seeing some information about it on the news, and thinking, "Wow. That's high." The view from inside the closed pod is very interesting. It's like you're looking at falling snow through your cabin window. You know, if he really did burst and explode, that would be unpleasant for the people down there. Most people would probably think, he's crazy, but I think it's a perfectly normal thing for such a daredevil to do. When he finally reached the ground, I bet he was like, "Guess who didn't go splat today? Me."
Alayna
ReplyDeleteI like that you have included a video to enhance the experience for your readers. It helps to give your readers the context or reference about the subject of your post. Try to remember to also do this in the opening sentences of your paragraph.
Reminder: one of our learning intentions with our blogs is to improve our writing skills, specifically the more formal tone (not conversational). The humour is apparent in your tone but I think you could also achieve it without the conversational / "slangy" voice.